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Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-30 . chapter 1
I think the second line should be worded this way:

"But feel the sweet of your touch"

That is how I originally read it and find it more enticing than the other.

Lovely poem.
liz anya 2005-07-29 . chapter 1
Ooh, brilliant haiku. Me likesies.
9 2005-07-29 . chapter 1
oh cool.
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