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Amidst the Void
Nobody-n-Particular
2005-07-30 . chapter 1
I think the second line should be worded this way:
"But feel the sweet of your touch"
That is how I originally read it and find it more enticing than the other.
Lovely poem.
liz anya
2005-07-29 . chapter 1
Ooh, brilliant haiku. Me likesies.
9
2005-07-29 . chapter 1
oh cool.
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