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Aslan Israel 2005-08-02 . chapter 1
I wish the sky would decide on its colourI wish the clouds would regroup equallyI wish the breeze would choose a directionI wish he still knows my name.

The world is still spinning without me.

that has to be my favorite part. A little depressing, but nonetheless meaningful. Very nice job.
Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-30 . chapter 1
Rich wording and format, I love it
pleasecometrue 2005-07-30 . chapter 1
Reading this reminds me of how tired and frustrated I am too. I really like the structure of this poem and the fact that it doesn't really have a set one. You could take it any where, very erratic and almost random, but each sentence is very well thought out. I like the little rant at the end too. The fact that you used no punctuation in it just further pushes the point across that you are tired and fed up. Great write, I'm impressed ;)
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