sweet jeeze.
That has to be one of the best short stories I've ever read. It's definately going on my favorite list.
Have you ever considered getting it published?

Horrible ending. I was just getting into the story and there is no ending?

This is amazing, you should continue.

Beautiful, everything about this story is beautiful. You can so deeply understand the pain inflicted by emotions and lost loves. I can't imagine having love stripped from my memory, I can think of few things worse. Your use of it in this story is very appropriate and good.

I suppose this story was supposed to be longer, because the plot line of the assistant never comes to a conclusion, but maybe that is the point: that this hell, this horrible situation, will never come to an end, as the war between heaven and hell can never come to an end.

I like the story-telling, I like the word choice, and I have very few complaints. Thank you for submitting
KylerM

Another bloody good story.

I'll admit I have never seen a hell like this in my mind, but I haven't really thought of hell entirely, except for the river that is the boundary. A bit odd, but that's as far as my imagination will let it go.

Your description is breath taking. I could feel myself there, as if on the scene of the writing.

The way you go into background detail without having a flashback is remarkable. I envy that talent.

You're a bloody great writer. Truly. I envy you without a doubt.

Regina O.B.

Wow! You have a really, really big imagination and the words you used to describe everything was pheonomonal!