Very nice.

splendid work...very deep and touching. the rhyme is great and the flow is on course. touching work

~Sorrow~

the beat and rhythm of this is incredible, it's so child-iosh in a way, that it fits perfectly. love it!

Odd, and in a way it can make the sense that you can't really explain. I like the repeating of words.

Keep it up.

Aw, you made me think of my sister and me, we were like that once. Things change and missing the old times make them so bittersweet. I love this.

Keep it up.

oh dont cry.

it makes everyones heart bleed.and then we'll all die.

beautiful.

Lovely touch, that "(tear)" Splendid.

isn't it the awful truth? you laugh and make promises knowing...or I should say thinking they would happen and now this...great work! I love the way you put it. touching and heartfelt!

~Sorrow~

this is so true, and i'm sure anyone who's left their childhood back could relate. wow. it makes me want to cry.

you capture the transition perfectly, its so lovely.

~* noelle

things as we are when we are young.are greatly missed as we changed when we get older.hm, nothing is as careless as it seems.that really, is something to miss.

things we do for love and looks.

How true, you portray well the passage of time and things lost in the midst of it.

Perfectly captures the essence of childhood friendship versus teenage years friendship. I love this, so nostalgic.