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| Gilee7 2005-10-30 ch 1, | This one is short, but good nonetheless. The repetition of "she loves you, she loves you" just made me sad each time. The whole poem just feels so . . . hopeless, and heartbroken. And the way the first letters spell out "she is me" is just amazing of you. I'm glad you pointed that out, because I never would have seen that probably. I'm not observant enough. It's so incredibly clever of you. Another 'thumbs up'. |
| ancient trees 2005-09-28 ch 1, | I love the fact that you can read the deeper meaning into this poem by reading vertically. It flows so pretty (like gently running water). |
| Ebony Stars 2005-09-10 ch 1, | your use of colour is simply amazing. You have such talent - "curved into a saddened smile" was a particular favourite. Delicious imagery and it isn't awkwardly written to fit into the acrostic pattern. bravo bravo! |
| QueenVixta 2005-08-29 ch 1, | This is very cleverly written, very emotional and beautiful. Great job. QueenVixta |
| simpleplan13 2005-08-12 ch 1, | so sad and beautiful.. I can relate.. i like hte litters going down but why arent the ses bolded... i could hel pyou eliminate the double spacing if you wish |
| Krystal Garcia 2005-08-10 ch 1, | Whoa,a very powerful, yet simple poem. So great, and different. |
| youzi 2005-08-10 ch 1, | soft, hauntingly beautiful..i loved how you made the "first letter of each line" thing work...most of the time writers who try that just ends up with something tacky!! do keep writing =D |
| myno 2005-08-08 ch 1, | ah, an acrostic. I'm a huge fan of those, though i've never written one myself. Very well written, as usual. |
| poetic abortion 2005-08-08 ch 1, | this was ** awesome, but the flow and word use seems detached and just doesn't flow right in my eyes. I really liked it and it seems like reality has crashed down, like the mythologic story of: echo & narcissus. it touches a chord and just weaves its words straight into your heart. lovely. ~* noelle |
| miss megan 2005-08-06 ch 1, | i thought this poem was amazing.please ignore that stupid person who flamed you below,they´re ovbiously jealous.brilliant work |
| Ethereal Oceans 2005-08-06 ch 1, | Well, conceited enough? You write this poem as if you're a ** goddess. Get over yourself. |
| Elizabeth Bilberry 2005-08-04 ch 1, | its so sad, yet it feels true to me. your descriptive imagery was just lovely. EB |
| Sarah-Brighteyes 2005-08-03 ch 1, | Okay you proved that i honestly can not choose a favorite from your pieces to read. *smile* Very unique and artsy in the hidden message. Another beautiful image you have splattered through this. I wonder if you gave this to anyone special...to see if they actually get it... the meaning, the message... the eyes. Wonderful once again. You made me smile, thanks for that. |
| White Tea and Ginger 2005-08-03 ch 1, | Beautifully written. Painful and sad and quiet. I read the bold letters. Writing is wonderful free therapy. Keep up the great work. I'm adding you to my favorite author's list, if that's alright with you. *Hillary* |
| Moonjava 2005-08-03 ch 1, | I for one really like the format and enjoyed the poem. Really well written. |