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| method acting 2005-11-01 ch 1,  | abuseSuch a tender subject, and you write it shamelessly. Again; excellent imgery and descriptions. Lovely job once more. |
| cmetalangel249 2005-08-28 ch 1, | abuse*Bending down to pick jaw up off floor* I am in awe. Speechless...almost. I just get one heck of a picture when I read this...WOW. |
| the.pink.life 2005-08-11 ch 1, | abuseWhoa, I don't even know how to comment on this. *jealous* I wish I could write something like that. My only criticism (and it's not that big of one at that) is sometimes it seems like the words you use are too big, if you know what I mean. All I'm saying is that some of the words seem a little overdone, like convoluted receptacles...it seems like there could be a better word choice there...but I have no suggestions. Anyways, I'll stop being critical b/c you're better than me anyways. |
| Venustas iaceo 2005-08-07 ch 1, | abuseOnce more, I'm really jealous of you. I only wish that one day I can assemble my words in such a beautiful way as you do. |
| XEtherX 2005-08-06 ch 1, | abuseI really really like this. Its awesome. Write more for me to read! *cracks whip* lol |
| Invalid Night 2005-08-06 ch 1, | abuseI enjoyed this poem. This was dark and (excuse my use of the word) raw, my kind of poem. I would have liked to see words that 'bit' me more. But keep up the good work. |
| lackluster 2005-08-01 ch 1, | abusevery interesting. i like the ending, "to nothing"... the descrptions and wording is very thorough, and that's great. lovely poem! |
| Moonjava 2005-07-31 ch 1, | abuseThis is lovely. I enjoye the flow in this. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-07-31 ch 1, | abuseA very engaging read, lovely. |
| FunkyFlower17 2005-07-31 ch 1, | abuselove the ending. awesome vocab ans some really well-written lines. love the imagery too. thank u for ur review! this poem is really great. well done and good luck:-) |
| Sorrowful Dreams 2005-07-31 ch 1, | abusevery interesting piece. in a way yes, it's sexuality..but yet not. this is really good though. ~Sorrow~ |
| Aquafied 2005-07-31 ch 1, | abusewow, the details and metaphors, perfect as the pencil scratched their wilting letters. just fabulous, the meaning is a bit rough and lovely. whoever is writing jungle fables for this citycriblling on the in illegible loops of gelatinous rain,-such raw passion. |
| Osunale 2005-07-31 ch 1, | abuseInteresting. I very much like the wording of this, moving and contemplative. |