M I think it would have been better if it hadn't rhymed. The rhyming made it sound a bit fake. Though, that's just me.

I enjoyed it.

this was a good piece of rhyming poetry. I've been reviewing things about an hour now, and this is the first poem that rhymed! I like to rhyme my poems too, i dont know why i just feel it gives it more rhythm. I like the message you convey, the feeling of sadness in just a few lines is great. I have written some poems like this, you should check them out. Reviews are appreciated! Thanks