So, I reread this yesterday (work is way overrated), and I realized that I never commented. So. I think that the basic idea for this is pretty good, but you need some serious character development. Throw in a few flashbacks or something, like back to when Tris first started cutting or something. And the whole thing with Christina's parents...it's interesting and all, but it doesn't really do anything for the plot except give Christina a reason to be bitchy. So either put more about that in or...find a different, simpler reason?

Wow. That was a lot. Now I'm done. Rock on and ciao.

wow. just wow. my only problm is that the ending was kinda rushed. u dont really guess that he really really likes christina until the end. we knew he kinda, but not totally. it was, all in all, good though.