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| Jessica 2007-08-19 ch 7, anon. | abusehey justin! it's very good so far :] soo much as happened in the first three chapters, i was surprised, but it keeps you intrigued. lol can't wait to read more :D goodjob ^_^ and that drink sounds really good. haha |
| Cinnamon-sama 2007-06-14 ch 7,  | abuseIt looks like Hiro is starting to live again and gain new friends. He almost seems... comfortable. 'Til next chapter... |
| sakuratears19 2007-05-27 ch 7, | abuseFumiko is such an interesting character! =D I like her. She's quirky and outgoing but can also be shy. Hiro probably has the biggest headache just listening to her... Poor Hiro. Anyways I really like this so much! I loved the other Vanilla and when I saw this I HAD to read it! =D Kudos to you! |
| Finwe 2007-04-05 ch 7, | abuseThis is turning out so sweet. :) I can't wait for the next installment! And did Fumiko really call him her boyfriend? LOL --Finwe =^.^= |
| Noihseret 2007-03-23 ch 7, | abuseMai! hush hush! lol. too late. the ending was cute. keep up the great work! |
| Haru-chan 2007-03-18 ch 7, | abusenice, love this story! keep up the awesomeness! |
| Adakua 2007-03-11 ch 2, | abuseOpps, I reviewed the wrong story, sorry. I thought you were Snowy Dawn. God, reading 2 stories at once is bad for you. Please, Please forget about ever reading the other review. Sorry again. lol Again, sorry. |
| Adakua 2007-03-11 ch 1, | abuseI think I know/remember you from somewhere. Wow, not being here for a long time takes alot from you. I'm sorry. -_- Anyway, I like the beginning, it started out super good. I like the storyline so far, I could care less for proper grammar. You're doing good so far. (p.s. Night Slayer, isn't that good you know. -_-) Till Next Time adakuchan |
| Cinnamon-sama 2007-03-08 ch 6, | abuseEach chapter, I become more enraptured with Fumiko. In the beginning she had me worried. I probably felt the same as Hiro, but she has started to grow on me. |
| Ice and Snow 2007-03-04 ch 6, | abuseyou like silence don't you? hm...very interesting? this is so...manga, i can't help but wonder... |
| .dear. Disaster 2007-03-04 ch 6, | abuseOh poo ;_; They just found out their feelings then all that stuff happens. I don't really like Fumiko, I like Hikary better :D Anyhoos, good story |
| Noihseret 2007-02-24 ch 6, | abuseaw, what a great chapter. I got a nice, calm feeling from this. the beginning was good too, how you compared the new school year to the last, only this time he was alone. that was very well written. Fumiko's so cute! I really like her. the ending was cute too. her devilish little smile... lol. I love the main character also. you really portrayed his personality well in this chapter. the only mistake I noticed was: "She giggled a little and looked to the side, and stepped up against the railing and leaned against it." 'side, and stepped up' should proably be 'side, stepping up'. just because it flows a bit better than using the word 'and' twice. good chapter, (seemed like a filler ^^) I can't wait for the try-outs now! lol. see you next review! |
| Noihseret 2007-01-27 ch 5, | abuseI love the description. it's quite captivating. update soon, please? I'm hooked ^^ |
| Noihseret 2007-01-27 ch 4, | abuseI really like your style of writing. it blends perfectly with this story. I love it ^^ lots of emotion, and it feels real too. |
| Nanao Nagase 2006-12-27 ch 5, | abuseThis story is amazing. It simply drew me in and forced me to continue reading up to the most recent chapter. I just kept on going and going, and it suddenly ends. You should update soon! Everything's great,but you could do with a little more description, especially in between bits of dialouge. The description of Fumiko's drink however... made me want to have a cup of it, pronto. Awesome job Nanao |