|Reviews for Flames of Death|
| Theladyofdarkness 8/13/05 . chapter 1
...wow...spooky...almost spell like..
| Elizabeth Ebony 8/9/05 . chapter 1
there is loadsa power.
| Utopia Story Group 8/5/05 . chapter 1
I think this is almost there as a haiku. Your line breaks are too arbitrary, and end on less powerful words. Distill this down. perhaps:
(Not sure how this will format as a review, so a slash - / means a line break)
Flames of death/
in the bottomless desire/
of my obsidian heart./
Take the above only as a suggestion.
| CarpeDiem28 8/5/05 . chapter 1
Simple but powerful
| liz anya 8/4/05 . chapter 1
| blackmoondagger 8/3/05 . chapter 1
Kewl. Not many people can write poems like this and get away with it. It's very deep and powerful.
| Ygg 8/3/05 . chapter 1
"Obsidian heart".. such vivid imagery! Love it.
| Nobody-n-Particular 8/2/05 . chapter 1
Quite nice, conveys a tireless passion.
| My Tears Don't Fall 8/2/05 . chapter 1
well, it was pretty good except its not a haiku. haikus are 5-7-5, yours is 5-8-6. write more though
| Cloud Burst 8/2/05 . chapter 1
nice, very nice!