...wow...spooky...almost spell like..

there is loadsa power.

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I think this is almost there as a haiku. Your line breaks are too arbitrary, and end on less powerful words. Distill this down. perhaps:

(Not sure how this will format as a review, so a slash - / means a line break)

Flames of death/

in the bottomless desire/

of my obsidian heart./

Take the above only as a suggestion.

Simple but powerful

Rich imagery.

Kewl. Not many people can write poems like this and get away with it. It's very deep and powerful.

"Obsidian heart".. such vivid imagery! Love it.

Quite nice, conveys a tireless passion.

well, it was pretty good except its not a haiku. haikus are 5-7-5, yours is 5-8-6. write more though

stlouisrams00

nice, very nice!