This is so sad. Good song.

Twilight Starr

wow that was really good. I loved the ring ring and splash splash additions... you've been doing some really great writing in my absence

I like how you used the sounds like, "Splash, Splash" To give the reader the idea of what you were hearing. Also I like this line-

"autumn leaves visits the city."

Heh, it's just me, I have a think with autumn and leaves, I love 'em, I like when they crunch beneath my feet.

Anyhow, very well done.

-Hanon