oh wow this was amazing. that was his grandson in the park? maybe? hmm... who was it?

you've really captured something here. the minute the older man saw the boy fall and hurt himself, crying over his wounds like they were the worst pain he'd ever feel in his life, it's almost like the old man remembered when he thought physical pain was the worst kind. simply because he didn't know of any other.

there were only a couple of mistakes such as "you’ve been slaughter" should be slaughtered. and at the end "with not regrets" should be no regrets. i think...

this story speaks volumes, be very proud of your work. it's wonderful!

I really loved the plot of this story. But there are several mistakes. Paragraphs would make it much easier to read, and I did catch a few grammatical errors. Other than that, you have a brilliant imagination and probably inspiration to write some amazing things. =)