Another great chapter! The conclusion is wonderful.

P.S. I'm glad you think so too =)

I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter. Very interesting indeed... Try to differentiate when one part ends and another begins, use a symbol or something. Until next time=)

I like it...I like it a lot. Keep it up =)

Great ending! This leaves you with a lot of options as to the way the story will go. I think you should have James be the dark prince for a while(say a few years) and have him wreak havoc upon the world, which Shana and the others try to stop. Be creative about it, though. Then there should be this whole underlying plot with Met and how he is secretly planning James' demise. I think there should also be a scene where Met orders James to kill Shana, making him choose between his master or love. Until next time=)

Very well done. Keep it up=)

I like where this is going...I think you should split the next chapter into sections with one on what James is doing and the other on what Shana's doing at the same time. It gives it a little more edge and it's easier to put in cliffhangers. That's all the advice I have for now...until next time=)

I see you've changed the names of some of the characters...I think you should pick a diferent name for Teela/Shana. And you missed a "trunks" at the end.

You're right, it did get deeper. There were the regular spelling, punctuation, and capitalization errors. Maybe you should have Roger kidnap Teela in the next chapter. That would really get James going.

Come on man u cant do this. Steal other charecters! your gay for that and i'm srry i had to flame u but theres no excuse for that shi* JUST ** ME OFF!

This is very interesting. I like how you used names from DragonBall Z. There were some mispellings and the sentence structure needs to be improved, but overall it was great.