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| xx-cronopio-xx 2006-01-11 ch 2,  | abuseThis is too brilliant, in my opinion better written than the first chapter (though that held its own, as well). I am amazed at how effectively you capture that state of mind with seemingly no amount of effort. Adieu, Kat |
| an-angel-in-hell 2006-01-11 ch 3, | abuseWow! This one was great, wasn't as clear as the others but that's cuz I'm not very deep. You have to continue this. I'm putting it on my fave. list! :) |
| an-angel-in-hell 2006-01-11 ch 2, | abuseNow THIS is more like it...still brilliant, still angsty, still great. |
| an-angel-in-hell 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abuseDude, I'm anti-abortion but I loved this anyway...it's so angsty and awsome and good and wow... |
| xx-cronopio-xx 2005-12-18 ch 1, | abuseHmm. I was surprised to find out that this story wasn't a one-shot. I've only read the first chapter so far, and I must say, your poetic gifts exceed the boundaries of poetry. Most interesting. Again, I like how you return to your subject, which keeps the story on track and helps it to retain a sense of order. I fully did not expect for the narrator to kill her parents, though I suppose anything could be possible in that frame of mind. My only concern: Perhaps a little tweaking with the imagery. "enveloped in misery's fog," for example, a little careworn. But besides that-- I doff my hat. I've grown very fond of your writing. Love alwyzKat |
| Spooky Potatoes 2005-10-09 ch 3, | abuseWHY HAS NO ONE REVIEWED THIS?!?!?! Wow. That's all I can say. You've got incredible talent at writing from different points of view, and your imagery is, quite frankly, beautiful. |