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| ginger delatite 2006-10-10 ch 1,  | abuseI really love this.I think it is its sheer simplisity that makes it so deep. It's life put into thirteen words but its those thirteen worlds that made me think.Keep it up! |
| philod 2005-12-16 ch 1, | abuseAccepting the inevitable. Love it. |
| NinjaStoryteller 2005-12-04 ch 1, | abuseIndeed, the big picture. It makes me wonder if this "happy man" had any real character depth. Nonetheless, this is a cool thought to be in haiku form. Not usually something that one would think to write about. |
| Smoky Bear 2005-12-03 ch 1, | abusetrue enough |
| Steel Winged Angel 2005-09-09 ch 1, | abuseNot in a traditional form of haiku in which nature is expressed, but the idea of life is. You show it well, but perhaps too simply. It seems to lack imagery. Not a bad beginning though. |
| Jezsh 2005-09-03 ch 1, | abusehaha that's great! No other words for it. I like the last line best... |
| Abby Sequioa 2005-09-03 ch 1, | abusesimple and lovely... good job |
| Doray 2005-09-02 ch 1, | abuseHi! Thanks for the reviews. Actually, the story "Kernos Duriel" is what I can refer to as my antidote for my occasional pet peeve, which is writers' block. Updating it will serve as a practice for me so that I can make stories that are better. It will never be a masterpiece. Okay, this poem of yours is short but it means much. The way you presented this fact of life is nice. ~Doray |
| Rave Nightingale 2005-08-26 ch 1, | abuseThis is true. But that's life I guess. Rave x |
| Krystal Garcia 2005-08-17 ch 1, | abuseThis poem is so true. I loved it. No a bad haiku, I must say. Keep up the work! |
| liz anya 2005-08-14 ch 1, | abuseThat's the way life goes. |
| Nobody-n-Particular 2005-08-08 ch 1, | abuseThat is life. Now we make the most of it, as he had done. |
| Sasami Kowa 2005-08-08 ch 1, | abuseHm..True |
| breezy nostrils 2005-08-08 ch 1, | abuseTrue, true. Nice job! |