I love the last little verse. A perfect ending.

It was vile and I loved it.

Favorite line: "i need a brazilian wax - shave i mean - because my pubes are longer than my leg hair." Seriously, that's too funny. And it just makes you sound like this sociopath who's like, la dee da, I'm thinking about killing someone but I need a shave. It's so random. This is pretty awesome. Love it. Keep writing! :)

::shudder::Beautiful.

OH MY GOD. you are a genius? wtf was that?

jesus christ. a review 4 months late. lol sorry but im sharing what i think of it now no matter how late it is. i thought this was beautiful. realistic&it had a distinct necrophilia feel to it along with a whole glamorous-sexual theme to -a-ut-iful.

I don't know what to say about this... it's ugly and beautiful at the same time. Favorite lines: "i wish it was nailpolish but it's most likely blood" and "maybe tomorrow i'll paint my nails & spill my waterbased PASSIONred polish & smear it with my fingertips (it'll look like a struggle took place) then my wishonastar would come true" and "i need a brazillian wax-shave i mean-because my pubes are longer than my leg hair but" (though that's gross, lol- loved the bit after it, too) and especially "there's a coupon for razors in the wal-mart ad - damn i can't resist." Wonderful piece. Disturbing and creepy, but absaloutly facinating and just gourgouse. (I can't spell tonight, grr.) Beautiful work, never stop writing.

i love love (& love) the "blood & nailpolish". beyond wonderful.

I love the format, scattered, you, and utter perfection. the premise, the correction of her words, the murder, the suicide, the love(/longing). beautiful.

Wow. Erm. That's slightly disturbing, but the message is nice - in a strange sort of way.

Your grammar is off in a few places, and it's messily typed, but it's pretty good.

That was... different, not bad just... different

hm? that was odd...

graphic, subtly disturbing, god do i love it.

'i wish it was nailpolish but it's most likely blood' I like this line. It sounds directly human.

disgustingly horrifying. hauntingly graphic.

pretty much perfect.

-salt.

This was awesome. It's dirty and vile and raw and that's what's so great about it. It's written in a very fluid language, and it's filled with angst and that's why I like it.

-marie