I like this chapter so far! This story is awesome!

This is a good chapter!

I like this so far!

Good job!

im desperately hoping that the couple of months needed are over b/c i would LOVE to have more! good luck on Torn Apart

Rei and Keisuke are perfect for each other. Rei barely seems to talk to Makoto and he only kisses her and tries for more... but she wont let him *cheer for Rei* =)

eww i hate sauer ** too we had to make in bio once. it smells SO gross. i love Amalie's acent. i tried once to write a story w/ a girl in it that had an accent and it sounded so bad that i just deleted it. lol. i hope that you will have a character describtion of Keisuke soon!=)

historys my fave subject too! im guessing wat happens is she sucked into that other world. w/ only a towel on *gasp*=)

I love your story!I hope you continue.

First response: WHAT!?!? NO! why I love this story!

Second response: Congratulations! I'm so happy for you. I hope you win that contest ^^ *hugs*

I think it is totally awesome that you are entering a writing contest like that! If you get published, even though I dont know you, I would feel strangely proud becasue I could say "I knew her when..." (kind of...)
Anyways, I wish you luck! I will so buy it if you do indeed publish!
That's my goal, get publsihed before I end high school. Of course, first I need to actually finish writing something...
...
Anyways, again, "luck"~~!

ignore highly unoriginal pen name (its writer in another language...unoriginal I say!)
this is my favorite quote fomr your story:
"But anyway, after the incense incident, he kissed me again and then he wouldn’t stop. So I think I seriously made out for the first time. It was super-intense, he was sort of grunting and moaning. I was sort of spazzing."
~~Torn Apart, Chapter 8,
I font know why, but it's funny
I like Keisuke the best, but I bet nearly everyone one does
I really like it, and I actually think you writing is pretty good. Well, you see, you know the writer is good when you read it and you actaully get absorbed into it and your not stopped by something that is worded funky...ish...ly ( - -' ... making up words...well...there really shouldnt be anything wrong with it...I mean, as long as the meaning of the word is easily figured out)..or some weird typo like Whatever spelled Wathvere or something like that...while typing this I think something totally random: why did I capatalize the w's?
hm...
I just have one thing o say which is so umimportant that... (stops when realizing that a simile hasnt been though of) ...anyways...it unimportant
when she first when keisuke, she's all like Keisuke-kun, and Makoto is all like, dont be so friendly or something? Well, I dont think she would immediately call him "kun" becuase she just met him and people usully dont call some one "kun" unless they are freindly and (i think) in the..same grade? im iffy on that subject (de subject o kun) (even though I taking japanese - -') what I am trying to say, wouldn't she be keisuke-san? And that isnt his last name, (another useless point that I honestly dont care about because quite frankly I love it the way it is and I dont mean for you to change it, just for future reference) they wouldn't be using the first name unless they were closer...
arg, never mind, just useless babbling (I should get a scholrship to collage on babbling skills...)
anyways, Im an author who appreciates you wnderful story making skills
(I have yet to put something on fpress but soon...soon...)
anyways
I like the story a lot
and I cant wait for the next installment (does saying installment make me sound smart (again, random)

sorry for making this review thing so long!

kool

WHO ITS LIKE HANUKKAH COME EARLY!! Another lovely chapter my dear, I dont know how long it has been up since I haven't checked my myspace in about a week, but in any case its is AMAZING and as always I am IMPATIENT and want the next chapter! I don't know how long I'll have to wait for the next one but I wait with eager...uh...eagerness! PS. I'm gonna tell Priscilla (animerox) about th chapter and I'm sure you'll be getting a review from her soon ^.^

still confused.