Great song. I loved the last two lines. Fantastic job!

Twilight Starr

wow... this was incredibly good... I loved it absolutely

I really enjoyed this. So emotional, but I agree with the other reviewer about the it. The son is better without it! Great job. The last line is just... WOW

I might regret saying this but: this is not a stupid song! I like the concept of the idea and several of the lines such as: 'the things you never dared to live,' and 'the fountain of the wishs' etc.

However, the whole poem, I think, fits together except for the final word, 'it.' It add a hard push to the poem... the other words just flow...

Good luck with your future pieces of writing.