that qas quite amusing, in a very twisted sort of way. i love how everything is so matter-of-fact, as if it's being taught to you, or as if it's just a casual conversation.

The title caught my attention and I decided to check it out. I really like the introduction, 'let's pretend' like a child's nursery game. Then, as the story goes on, you paint it with such graphic adjectives and scenery descriptions that I could almost see the crimson lakes. There is a lot of creativity and thought put into this and I like it a lot. The narritive is logical and does not interfere with your plot. I really like this story and I am going to add it to my favorites list. I only have one minor suggestion: there is a typo in your title, nothing big. Toodles. ^_^ ~choco

I really enjoy the way you write. This story was thoughtful and actually made me think...Good Job. I can't really say anything bad about it.