wow.

Great Imagery and powerful message. 25 year old virgin eh :. that would suck vagina. I love the line "Soon to be bled on," and the whole "delicious dirt" concept.

But the entire story of "virgin" marry is kinda far fetched. like she had a baby for christ sakes. anyways getting of topic...Great piece my preppy little friend.

All I have to say is, amazing. Love it.

powerful, oh so powerful! you have poured out your heart no matter how sinnful people think it is... well done. i like this.. a lot. ash xoxox

This is delicious dirt.

Such a cutting piece, I love the words you have used, the wordplay, especially the final lines "I will love every minute of my/delicious dirt" - it made my spine tingle. Your pieces are deep, moving, and true. Keep up the good work!xo - Acrobia

haha... my favorite bit here is [by 16, I hope to find myself/sprawled beneath a sweat-speckled,/lusty-eyed boy] it's just so unabashedly determined and honest. I feel like the beginning of this could be a little smoother-it seems like you repeat the ideas one time more than is needed-this would be great if it were all sharp and clear like the lines I just pulled out. also, overuse of the word "dirt" and its different forms. this is a very well-written piece.

Very inspiring. You used very unique imagry. I really like this poem.

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i really do adore this one. something about it. wow.

and i completly agree with you. i for one thing know i could never live in the old times when people were just so...traditional like that. it makes me angry. but whatever.

lovely poem

Well, that was interesting. Rather cynical it seemed to me. America society is so obsessed with self image and sex it's really sad isn't it?

over/under sexed much?

haha/ tis good mon amie, tis good.

When I finished this, I just wanted to laugh. Laugh in a 'sadistic, bittersweet, this is an amazing poem' sort of way. I lovelovelove the imagery. This poem is spendid and just oh-so perfect. This is my favorite part: 'sprawled beneath a sweat-speckled,/lusty-eyed boy as he/sighs my name and soon becomes/the delicious dirt beneath my finger nails'.