Um...why haven't mobiles occured to anybody? Oh I see. ;) they've conveniently run out of battery... Sorry. I love convenient stuff.

Aw! ^_^ Off to get fat.

I think something should happen soon: some big, plot moving event.

Wow you really pay attention to detail. Wouldn't Rae be in Intensive Care after being riddled with cactus? 0.o How big is this ranch if it takes so long to cross? It must be huge!

I like the way this is starting. Have plenty of hunches.

Isn't it convenient how they all have dogs? Another thing: if their parents died, the social services would have taken custody. Perhaps chnage it so that they signed the papers so that (for example) the social services thought they were with a foster family, the foster family thought they were in an orphanage, etc... and the ranch remained as part of the inheritance to be given when Rae came of age.

I like your dialogue; you're very good at that.

Would someone really say 'ouch' if they fell off a horse?!PP

Hmm. I don't really like the idea of a prologue like this- a good story shouldn't need an introduction. I think you should try to explain what you say here in the story narrative in chapter one. I like the idea, though. :)

Shessh, how come no one has reviewed this?! This is a good story!

Anyways, good job on this piece, I enjoy it for many reasons. I love the setting (I'm a cowboy by blood, so I gotta love the states like Montana, Wyomin', Idaho, all them great states.) I love the simplicity of the characters. Everyone (including I) always gives great back stories, but yours were short, sweet, and to the point, which I enjoy.

I also like how the story is not generally dramatic and takes its time. Can't go wrong with slowly introducing plot details (but I reckon that is why people don't review, too "slow-paced.") Although your chapters seem to get shorter and shorter every chapter, I still enjoy it. I hope you update soon and don't get discouraged by lack of reviews! I await a new chapter!

And for anyone who likes to read reviews before the story to see how other people thought of the story, read this! It is good. Good job (for like the millionth time...) Welcome to my Favorites List Loyal2CrissAngel!

-Anters-