my minds sees every image from the whoreish rose, to the grass in valleys lush, to the mountains in the morning sun...flawlessly flows...beautifully ideal...but whether you like it or not ill write about a mountain if i want to :P you Remain my favorite and inspire my great Queen

That was a joy to read, feeling effortless and light. You've done another outstanding job here. Excellent! Your writing is inspiring.

That was simply wonderful. It expresses what I've been feeling for a long time, but does it with a lovely elegance and chiding voice that I could only hope to get.

Like others, I think I'll single out 'whorish beauty of the rose', because that really was a very memorable line. But perhaps even better than your descriptions was your rhyming scheme, which really was so very neat it tied up with a little bow.

And better than either of those was the last four line, which were perfection.

Very cool, I love your rhyming scheme, it feels polished as well as effortless.

Oh my goodness! This is 100% enchanting, and strange that I should read it the day I return from a week in the sequoias! You have the gift of verse and rhyme, and you use it beautifully. Having said that, I'm ashamed to have written a short piece on the mountain sunrise. I'm tempted now to burn it, because as you have said, no words can do it justice. Indeed, the only thing that can truly describe it is silence. Pure and complete silence.

-Leila

Nice choice of words, great flow. Good job!

Excellent doesn't even begin to describe it.

Flows beautifully, no awkwardness so common in a lot of poems, and no spelling/grammar issues (THANK YOU--I can't stand reading anything written by someone who can't even find their spell-check button).

Lovely imagery ("O, take the ivory crystal snows, / The whorish beauty of the rose")!

Perfectly translates my frustration at times toward "poets" that write about "love" and "angst" all the time."These things, and many other joys / Are free for ruin by your noise." And stay away from true beauty... ahh. Too true.

I also really like the medieval-ish way you wrote it ("O'er", "ye", etc.). It adds just the right tone.

"Three-verse octosyllabic couplets"... wow, a mouthful. It works really well here and you did a great job on it.

The only thing I can think of that might help it read better would be to format it in verses (Shift+Enter single-spaces it), but your way works fine here.

I really loved this poem, and hope to read more from you.

Great poem, flows nicely, with no awkward rhymes (like I have so many of).