it's really very interesting and it attracts your attention. oh, so beautiful!

Beautiful.

This is absolutely splendid! I love it. I love how you incorporate gods and goddesses from different mythologies- Eve, Adonis & Gaia, Ra, and (I don't know from which, but I'll just assume) Tehuti. It seems so intricate, with the mention of pomegranets (We all remember Persephone), and the way you described them like a small community. I don't know what I'm talking about. _ But I really like this.

-marie

Ah, imagery is rich in detail and emotion. Flurries of windspun ferocity blaze in this poem.

very nice

this is so wonderful, the writing clear and evident. it still rings in my ear! I loved it, such a gorgeous poem.

* noelle

wonderfully written,words still ringing in my ears.

Interesting and different. I like it. Nice imagery as well.

"Fascinating" is the best word I can think of to describe it. "Beautiful." "Excellent." Those work too.

I really liked "ou d" and your use of parentheses-amateurs (*cough* me *cough*) couldn't use them like that without messing it all up, but you used them well. Also, "(theyareone)" at the end rounds it out perfectly and explains it all.

Some brilliant imagery too ("her sulfuric tresses").

I like how it's not flowy, but it stops in just the right places to place emphasis on things ("eve walks along the garden / (alone)").

The only thing I would suggest would be to describe the gods a little more; give them personality, or at least an adjective, with the name (unless impersonality was what you were going for).

I really like it, especially the idea that all the gods are one and the way you depict that. Great job-I can't wait to read more of your work!

Interesting. Excellently written. I loved the end "(theyareone)." Which reminds me, The use of parenthesis rock. Bravo!

Hm. That was interesting. And good.