This is a good story, and it's good the way it is, but I think that if you reread this in a year and rewrote it, it would be ten times better. That's just me, maybe, but I really do think that although you are good already, you're going to improve a lot more.

Lol. This sounds really familiar. The plot I mean. I dunno, sounds like I've read it before. Somewhere. @__@ Duno.

I'll love you even more if you wrote more romance fiction, Jo!

Sorry for a non-constructive review but I liked the story a lot. I don't think that there's any grammar mistake (in my point of view). Just keep up the good work!

-Ganbate-~Aki~