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| Nathaniel J 2006-06-23 ch 1,   | You might have told me about this a while ago, but you didn't really develop it at all. Are you still going to work on it? |
| squiggle-line 2006-03-01 ch 1, | "undeniably Turkish coffee" I like that line! "...lingered [too] long"? "As she [laid] back..."? "breathing at her ankles" =D "There she wore..." Around her ankles? "Her art was pleasure and she was a master artisan." Nice. Interesting. Please continue! |
| Malerie 2005-08-12 ch 1, | THE NARRATOR IS A GUY! lol to be more specific he is an Arabic Lord. lol |
| Honeyfoot 2005-08-11 ch 1, | I love the descriptions and will be waiting for more! |
| CeeDeeJay 2005-08-11 ch 1, | Okay so im assuming that the narrator(not spelt right)was a girl. And i dont have to tell you that the chapter was to short, but i guess thats a good thing in this case, because it made me wonder what was going to happen next. Waiting for a second chapter,Cee |