Very interesting piece. :)

this is the fourth reason why you rock. I like the way you cut up words, its nice to see how they fit together :)

wow... this was very beautiful. i especially loved the unusual depictions - it echoes in my curls/The slur of cake-y, false sincerity... and the last few stanzas are just amazing... :

wow. this was so amazing i'm pretty much speechless. wonderful job. . . this was just so real, so there... i felt like i was there. i liked how you took the words & turned them into different words/shortened them to make diff. words... great job.

Such a play on words you accomplish.

love the ending line. theres something about this...incredible. it really scribbles out the emotions so vividly. fantastic, even.

oh my god, this was so so great. I adoreed "PRESSING. PRESSING. PRESSING.", it just sounded so perfect and paranoid to me. this was deliciously different. a little mind-blowing. :D

fantasies are fun. great poem!

I adore your use of text styles and spacing to enhance the effects of this piece. Awesome.

'Slimy'. Eugh. Just that word gives me the shivers.

This is intense. Nice work.

beautiful.

the format is very rough. it would seem a bit overdone, but i think it goes great with the words. wonderful!

Intersesting begining-I WILL keep reading!

Speaking of "Emmaline", I knew someone from camp named Emmaline...never thought I'd see the name again. Heh.