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| Manifest-Destiny-x X 2008-05-03 ch 1,  | abuseThe imagery in this is amazing! I like this A LOT! |
| beyond.that.horizon 2006-12-13 ch 1, | abusedude. where has your work been all my life? its beautiful. its mysterious. its inspiring. its soulful. its great. its like a freaking sun setting in my heart. seriously, though. your writing is awesome. im so unworthy! |
| Xerophyte 2006-10-11 ch 1, | abuseThis is quite excellent. In fact, I've decided that I'm in love with it. The meter is off in one place ("beyond horizon goes the sun"), but it's amazing. I especially love the first and last tw stanzas. This is great. Thanks for your review...yeah, it's all so much better when you look in your notebook in the morning and wonder "where did THAT come from?" -Xero |
| vampiric-happenings 2006-10-09 ch 1, | abusethis is great. good imagery. i think, maybe, 'sun don't'--sun doen't..but that's me and my grammar. good work! -thanks for the reviews!- |
| sarah1491 2006-09-21 ch 1, | abuseVery nice. I like it. :) |
| Kaitlyn J. Richards 2006-09-15 ch 1, | abuseI like the flow of this, you set it up well, and I really like the last four lines...good work, and thanks for your reviews. |
| no.peace.los.angeles 2006-09-14 ch 1, | abuse"painted wings and avant-gardes" - That is a stunning line. The way you've phrased things in this is fascinating - it's not really proper English, but it works. I'm sad that you only have a few pieces on here and haven't updated since March, because I'd like to see a lot more from you. Keep writing! :) |
| fairEtales 2006-03-08 ch 1, | abuseaww. so sad. wonderful job. you have a wonderful way of getting the image across in this poem. |
| Cirien Phoenix 2006-02-27 ch 1, | abuseSad and bittersweet. An excellently painted picture. Beautiful job. ~Cirien Phoenix P.S. Thank you for the review on "Bleeding." Glad you liked the humor even though it really did destroy the flow, but I wanted humor more than structure. Thanks! |
| ConcealedWay 2006-01-28 ch 1, | abuseYou have many reviews. What else can I add? Only that I like the line; -How the sunset’s orange cries- And the rest as well! :) |
| Johana 2006-01-18 ch 1, | abuse"sunset’s orange cries" I love that line :D |
| silverguard 2006-01-11 ch 1, | abusebrilliant work! may want to check some of the ryhmes though... i sad to think that you don't feel that any more |
| Bee Stings 2006-01-10 ch 1, | abuseHuwaw. Soulful and intense. I like it. You are natural when it comes to depicting warm, romantic scenes. Spice it up. You're doing a great job. Oh, and thanks for your review on my poetry. :) |
| blacklives4ever 2006-01-09 ch 1, | abuseI could really feel this. It's fantastic when someone can actually make someone else feel something through their words. It sort of reminded me of the beginning of "Grease," actually, how they're on the beach. Only it's absolutely beautiful. Great job. Thanks a lot for your review! Keep writing! |
| Raspberry Twirl 2006-01-06 ch 1, | abusesad, deep, touching. (almost made me cry) very very nice! great title, catches reader's eyes right away! thank you 4 the review on dancing lavender,raspberry twirl. |