Nice rhyme, it flows nicely.

Straberi: this poem could have been good...but then you started doing the rhyming thing like everyone else. poetry does not have to rhyme. and the line: "With temperatures very hot" just didn't fit. I just didn't like it.

dracula: i'm sorry i wasn't listening to my friend as she read this poem for i was jazzersizing three feet away and it all passed right through me like a midnight gay ghost. so...i can't exactly review you now can i? nope.