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the.pink.life 2006-10-21 ch 1,	abuseThis poem has a very medieval feel to it, like we're talking about a knight of some sort. I think a lot of that comes from the first stanza, with the inspiration being like "a leathery sword." (Which is fabulous imagery, by the way.) There's a lot to this poem, and you've done a nice job with it. I don't feel like I could do this poem justice, so I don't think I'll attempt an analysis. Keep writing! :)
Michael l'oeil fol 2005-10-21 ch 1,	abusegreat work...again your word choice is wonderful...almost has a surrealistic quaility... CMF
Sorrowful Dreams 2005-09-04 ch 1,	abuseamazing writting here. It does show that you shouldn't differentiate reality to imagination perfecly. ~Sorrow~
An-Author-At-Heart 2005-08-28 ch 1,	abuseThis poem is very good, the description is nice and the words flow wonderfully. It was also very thought-provoking. Keep up the great work! And thank you for your review of my haikus "Glimpses of Nature".
catseyeview 2005-08-19 ch 1,	abuseExcellent, and how you brought in the end...
Aneliz Rei 2005-08-18 ch 1,	abuseBrilliant. The piece in its entirety is simply brilliant. It is a distant and Romantic voice you've used, one that weaves a foggy tale with a lasting impression, and one which particularly befits the subject of this poem. Kudos.
Nobody-n-Particular 2005-08-14 ch 1,	abuseVivid description, with moment by moment movement that sends me shivers.
Prevaricate 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuseYour imagery is postively wonderful, especially in the first stanza. "drawing inspiration like a leathery sword/that whipped tenderly into bruises/-red blurring into mauve" Excellent use of color. The idea that the storyteller melds truth and lies together adds an air of mystery. What's real, what's not? Very vivid. Excellent idea, even better portrayal. Wouldn't change a thing. Prev'
Osunale 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuseThis is interesting, the words jolt right through the mind. I particulary like the images of the first stanza.
Aquafied 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuseoh, i am awestruck at how beautiful this is.just amazing, the delicacy and wow. ending in a lie. perfection. personified. and flawed.
FunkyFlower16 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abusethis is awesome! i love the imagery and the way its like ur narrating a story. great last verse. it's almost shocking. well done:-) ~mez~
LemonFlats 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuseOoh. This is interesting. You have great imagery here("drawing inspiration like a leathery sword / that whipped tenderly into bruises") that describes his stories as well as the way he tells them, and it adds to the mood. I like how you tell his story--of what he does, how he does it, a bit of why he does it, and leaves the reader pondering about the future. Grammar/spelling: Nothing wrong that I can see. I like how you capitalize Once and nothing else (except "Now" near the end--was that a mistake?). Perhaps if you added a period onto the end, it would add more finality to his silence, and it would be like a train screeching to a halt in a huge valley, and you can hear the echoing for a while after, leaving behind a stunned silence (or, at least, that's what I see). The flow: Your method works well here, pausing in all the right places. You could add more (Can he help lying? Did his lies hurt anyone? How did they make him feel? Uneasy? Proud? Did he make enemies?), but I think that your point is mostly gotten to already. Great job--keep writing!
Elizabeth Ebony 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuselovely...i can still hear the words as i close my eyes. e.ebony
anovelworld 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuseImpressive. I particularly like the second stanza, the way you seem to describe it as the story being part of him that can't be contained... or at least that's what I got. :P Thanks for the review, stop again sometime!
underminingfaith 2005-08-13 ch 1,	abuseI didn't understand this poem too well... a storyteller moulding truth and lies together? anyway, nice images - especially the 2nd and last stanzas.

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