Ooh! This made me laugh - I can relate to this situation - getting scared by creepy Janitors at school! Gahh!

Melanie

This, I can say, is your best. You're truly a talented Singaporean writer. Are you in CAP? I love the last chapter the most. The description is familiar and beautiful.

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Oh, I LOVED this SO much! _ All the descriptions... I LOVED it all! _ Especially:" liquid sunlight" AWESOME!

Uh... its probably because its a monday, and i'm really pathetically slow on mondays...but i don't uh... get it...uh...i loved the format of this, though, really unusual and unique...but...uh...reading on...

Oh... so sad... depressing...awesome...reading on...

wow! AWESOME! MAMAZING descriptions! Reading on...

Really beautiful. I love the way you put emotion into your writing. Yay, someone else who likes spider silk! I've always thought it was really beautiful. This is really really lovely. I love the last paragraph. Two lines. Whatever, you know what I mean! Keep writing!

Lol, this is different two the previous chapters! It made me smile. The first line was really good, it really caught my attention. Good overall piece! Keep writing!

I loved the description of the bench, that was really good. You have a really intriguing way of looking at things. It makes me smile! And what you said about people choosing not to feel guilt was so true! This is turning out to be a lovely collection of descriptions! Keep writing!

Amazing description! Really beautiful. I loved "Happiness reverberates through the valley, it's sound ringing clear as a bell", happiness really does have a sound, doesn't it. And I love the way you've given the grass personality! Really lovely piece of writing. It makes the reader feel content, I'm not quite sure why! Keep writing!

hee hee. LOVE this extract! u should write more stuff like this. it's very original but heck, theres not much to say. its really funny but i can imagine this happening. the brackets r the best bits. AMAZING job, write another one soon!:-)

beautifully written. I LOVE the imagery and accurate description in this, i can practically see it all. amazing extract, i like it, great job:-)

hmm. well i liked the beginning, where it was mysterious and unknowing. but when you said its a cat its kind of like aw, you blew the surprise, in a way.

seems...cute?

not one of my favorite things. not to be mean or anything, just not my fancy.

m. it seems a little bit choppy in some parts, like it says white and black, white and black. i just would think it would have said white and black, black and white, it just seems to flow then again, thats just me

I like this, it's easy to identify with yet it contains a slight mystical atmosphere in the words you create. The idea of taking a picture of life and then writing about that exclusively is a new one to me, and I'd like to see more examples of this from you. Nice job :)