such beautiful imagery.. and very nice flow =)

I really like the imagery you have in here, the sun exhaling is a startlingly accurate depiction of what it seems like sometimes. I also like how you mixed in some different poetic decives, like alliteration; it really helps the flow of the entire thing. You're also very good at picking out approximate rhymes that don't sound unnatural or out of place, that's a really hard thing to do.

The only lines that nagged at me a bit are the fourth to last line and the last one. The rhythm seems off slightly in the former, and I can't decide whether I like the word "floaty" or not. The last line definitely seems off a bit...though I do realize that the line itself is about lingering, so having the rhythm seem to hang for a few syllables might not be such a bad thing. But play with that line, maybe shorten it just a tad, and experiment with the wording.

But even if you didn't change anything, I do really like this. Nice stuff. ^_^

A very lovely, very legato piece. Beautiful colours and word choices, and the sentiment of the last line is very warm. Again, I admire your choices for punctuation - the lack of it really enhances the poem, as I'm sure you're aware! :)

Excellent! You know how I feel about bad poets ruining lofty topics. But you have done the sunset justice. Congratulations.

The one thing that's nagging at me about it is the word "convey". I don't know why, but it's like a rock in a bowl of daisies. Like a peanut in a boston cream pie. It gets your meaning across correctly, but it's an annoying, crunchy, ugly little word and it bugs me for some reason. You could try a more chewy word (I can't think of one right now) or change the phrase. Maybe. Or maybe you like peanuts in your pie, I don't know.

Excellent rhyming! I myself can't write very well in rhymes, so I really admire those who do...:) This is really really beautiful, I like the "gentle, floaty" peacefulness it conveys...it captures the subtle shifts on colour and mood of the evening perfectly. Love these lines, "Caressing faces, illuminating chances/Of lovers’ heartbeats growing stronger". Very well done!

Absolutely one of the better uses of imagery that I have seen. Very colorful, and great expression. Not as in-depth as it could be, though I think that the semi-simpleness works for this more than anything else could.

A lovely piece.

Beautiful detail and imagry, I enjoye it, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.