I like how the rhymes give it a smooth feeling. Very well written; very thought-provoking. I like it.

I like the rhyming and the rythm...for some reason you seem to ramble a bit, like you started one poem, but finished another,but I especially liked the second half, it seemed to become increasingly more deep as you got further into the poem. Nice work, and keep it up

Great poem, well done and keep writing!

~Anna~