I not sure about the short lines, but otherwise it was really good. I agree by the way about the waking from daydreams, it is very hard. Silver Smiley ;)

Simple but with lots of meaning. I like it.

Oh, I agree I can get so wrapped up in daydreams myself as to be little more than a dazed mass for entire days. As far as criticism goes, I despise those short short lines. Might just be me though.