im glad Jay-Ling recommended u

this is really straight from your heart... good job!

Hi Jo, how are you? I'd love to hear from you sometime! _ Great poem, well done! Keep writing!

Anna

hmph. I don't necessarily agree with the potential accuracy of the last statement... but otherwise, this poem completely hit home for me. I love the stream of consciousness style and how you split words up, making it seem choppy and a little fitful. my only suggestion is to perhaps link a potent image to this... it's good as is but if you add a vivid image, it will be more memorable to a reader. just a thought. well done.