The character building is going good. Although there are a lot of characters thrown at the reader at once... I think I got confused for a moment... Its still good I understood who was who... Also it was good to see the action start coming through. You have a really good start to this so far... Keep up the good work.

I also hope to see more of the jonah character... Its always entertaining to see the bad guy.

good good... this story is really coming along. I like the character building that you are doing. Its like the reader can connect with what they are reading. The details are vivid.. It defiantly paints a picture. This chapter the problem is getting clearer. I just want to see Kaela kick some ** right now...

This chapter was good. You have a lot of good descriptions that keep the reader glued. You also have a lot of suspense leaving the reader wondering whats going on. I mean there is action, but there is no clear plot right now, it'll develop over time. You have clear dialogue. This story is really coming along great. Reminds me of Ann Rice... keep up the good work

good good. I like the vibe of the story... Its mysterious and dark. There's not much in the chapter but its a good set up of the story. I hope your muse takes you a long way with this one.