Difficult to comment on songs because, obviously, you can't hear the tune, and that's really what makes or break a song (though listening to the radio nowadays you wouldn't know it - unless, of course, you're a Terry Wogan fan. Apparently nowadays music doesn't need a tune: how else would the likes of Eminem and 50 Cents win awards?).

Anyways, this appears to be reasonable, though a little repetitive, though again, when set to music it may not seem that way.

Matt

I can actually hear it in my head too. Like you said though, it's ok. Good job.

I like it very much! I have a feeling that if I were to hear a recording of the song, I'd go out and buy the cd!

Good job!