I really like this one, it's so generally uplifting. Great job.

exquisite and entrancing imagery, totally left me in awe.. impressive!

Beautiful. :)

something about this tells me you're not so new to fictionpress. or maybe you had a fanfiction account before, or are just really good at getting new stuff right the first time.

nevertheless, it has this aura around it that just speaks brilliance. amazing.-

to your review:

firstly, thank you so much, i don't think i've ever recieved such an interrogating and helpful and interesting review.

to all your questions, i'm pretty sure that's all they'll ever be, unanswered questions. i never meant to answer them in the poem, but i'm sorry if that bugs you or anything.

anyways, you really do seem like a great writer. i'm truly amazed. do keep writing, as newbie-cliched-overstated as that sounds.

I can't believe you said in your profile that your poems aren't that good. This is amazing! Occasionally the wording is awkward, but other than that, it works. I loved how you rhymed the line 'watches puffy denim-blue clouds gather' with the line 'of natural cleansing... pitter patter.' Very good.

Also, I just wanted to say thanks for the review on my poem, London. I always appreciate it. Keep writing!

beautiful poem! i loved your imagery...

This a very unique poem. The ending is powerful, and leaves an impression in my mind. This is well written, and I think that many people could relate to it.

This is a very interesting poem... It seems to combine two elements: rain/nature, and the gold (mirror). I like it. The rhyme in the first stanza was kind of quiet and not the best, but that's okay. "watches puffy denim-blue clouds gather." That line made me grin. It's just- a very cute line. Makes me think of little clouds cut out from old jeans and sewn onto another cloth with buttons and large seams... and.. it reminds me of Yoshi, too, for some reason.. Hm... Hehe, anyway. I really like it. I think I understand it, and I think I relate. Good job.

-marie