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Reviews For: Sir Pascal

live4today
2005-08-16
ch 1,
Very funny. I especially like the last line.
The Amu
2005-08-15
ch 1,
Eh he he! A great interruption to the monotony of my day. I loved all your little jokes. The end was great. I don't know that I can criticise anything technical either. Or maybe you could try and rework the start to liven the pace. I know it's a very short piece but I wonder if it doesn't take a while to really start going...

I dunno. I suppose it's fine the way it is. Well done!

^_^
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