aw...this is such a sweet and touching poem and at the sme time its also so sad. i really enjoyed it!

absolutely beautiful. It really is.

WOW! i actually started to cry when i read this. your story took me in and then turned so sad. its beautiful you have my highest rating~!~

Keep up the Wonderful work~!~

~Original Lolly~

wow, this is sad...

again, great poem. definate talent here...

I like this very much, especially that extra part at the end.

I am going to be severely critical now because i know your writing could have so much more impact and you have so much talent.

OK. some of this and some of your other poems are vague. take "in your domain", for example. It would be so much more interesting if you described the furniture, the way you were sitting or just the real name of a place. It just seems very dettached (sp?) and not until that last bit is your desperation conveyed, because you add your own specific thoughts. Another example is "Neither in marriage nor, / Consequently,/In flesh." come on, you can do better than that! remember my undercover ** poem? well it applies to stuff like this, write in normal words. (not crudely, im not asking you to write **, just write as if you were explaining using speech). There are more examples from this poem and your others, but i hope you understand what i mean now ^_^I'm sorry if this sounds like a rant, or that I'm being overly harsh, writing is only your hobby after all! but the advice is there if you want it :)

again very well written, i liked it!!

How come? What if she's secretly hoping it's her you love? Keep on keepin' on! This is so great!!

Luv, Anne Hereatta

True Child of the Xenu

i like your poems ^^ even though i'm not much one for lovei love the line in this one, ''We would never sit on Scarborough pier''your a great writer, keep it up ^^

I love it!! once again very passionate!

WOW...this is more than a crush..it is an inflatuation...but its sweet...just tell her, its worked for me ^_^ Keep it up ^_^

That's so bittersweet...It's beautiful. Is this poem serious? What I meant to say is, did you write this poem out because of something that REALLY happened? 'cause if so, tell the girl what you feel about her. Any girl would die for a guy who writes poetry like you do. And trust me, I would know - I'm a girl(or so I'm led to believe). Keep writing...it's really good.

Much love;12goingon30

That's really nice. Even I admit it was sweet. Disgustingly sweet, but I'm not complaining. Very good, great emotions... Awesome writing. Good work.

-Robin