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Myryu-kun 2007-05-01 ch 3,	abuseFinally, A update after a long time. It so happens I looked at my favorites at the time. I didn't put this on my Alerts list. Gah! But keep up the good work. ^_^ ~Myryu-san
Virage 2007-04-02 ch 3,	abuseWow it's bee so long since I've read this story, I almost forgot what it was about. But after reading the first few lines, I quickly remembered what it was lol. Magical girl parody! Sorta! Not so much in this chapter as the other ones. But still funny! I just happened to be looking through my favorites to decide which ones I needed to alert and which ones I needed to get rid of. I'm so glad you updated! Yorokonde, you get the alert! Ok, so it took a bit for me to remember what happened, but like I said, I quickly remembered the characters. Nashi was named after her teddy bear, that's awesome lol. And you made him kawaii to the max in Hana's eyes, good stuff. Just one thing, I don't remember Flower at all. Man, that's a little depressing. Is she like a personified version of her conscious, the voice in her head? It's a really cool idea and I love it lol. There should be more voices in people's heads with names as characters in stories lol. At least, I think that's what it was. The chapter was pretty focused on Hana and Nashi and not a whole lot happened, except the crazy antics of Shiroi's friends and what not. Oh and the part with the school and the evil girls who always pick on Hana, awesome! I was so scared for Hana I kept thinking, "Quick run away! Kick them between the legs--oh that only works on guys..." But the tension was so great, I had goosebumps. The people at school can be so cruel sometimes...but in this case it looks more like the work of dark magic. On another note, the bits of Japanese dialogue was fantastic...if you knew Japanese lol. Watashi wa nihongo o wakaru yokatta desu ne? It really adds the hint of anime/manga which makes it feel a little more cinematic. But there was the sentence toward the end that felt odd. When Hana says to the evil girl that the teacher might come, I figured Hana would have said sensei and not teacher, since sensei fits much better. And one last thing, Utsukushii-san means "beautiful" doesn't it? What a nice way to describe someone via name lol. Please update again! lftnc
EverlastingBliss 2007-03-31 ch 3,	abusehaha! funny! looking forward to next chappie! XD
Haru-chan 2007-03-29 ch 3,	abusenashi is 25?! wow. yay! finally an update! love thhis story really i do! see you next update.
EverlastingBliss 2007-03-29 ch 1,	abusei really like it:) Update soon!
ainedamdz 2006-12-20 ch 2,	abusehey there! i just read through your story, and i must say that i quite like it! Admittedly, it's a bit like chrono crusade, but then i can't be too sure. however, it seems really cool. i wish you'd continue working on this. keep it up and we'll see. update soon! ^^
Myryu-kun 2006-12-17 ch 2,	abuseNice job.
Haru-chan 2006-12-17 ch 2,	abuseTHis is really good! i love what's ahppening so far, especially hana's thoughts about what's goning on! it's really hilarious, i can't wait to read more.
Virage 2006-12-16 ch 2,	abuseGreat story. Like the others said though, tons of typos in the chapter one. Not so many in chapter two. But I love the feel that the story gives off. It screams paradoy. And the brother and his friends? OMG they're a riot. It really is funny to imagine a bunch of hot guys hanging out with each other and she just sort of gets stuck with them. Ahem, not that I'm advocating the usage of lots of hot guys, cause like dude, I totally don't play both teams...I think...I hope. Not that's there's anything wrong with that. Right... So anyway, it's a fun story to read. I love the implied parody of Hana and her laughter at the beginning of the fight was awesome. And then the namedrops of the other magical girl shows was just as hilarious. I've totally seen all those shows. Don't judge me! But the show, hah I just called this a show; this story has its serious moments too, the classroom scenes and the shrine scenes (I'm reviewing this and chap 1) so I really respect that. You've gone to both extremes, cute and funny to lonely and prejudice. This would be a magical girl show; I did it again; story, for a more mature audience. Which sounds strange, but I think that's how I see it. I really didn't have a problem with fluidity, descriptions, setting, and explanations so far. I'm impressed. It felt pretty natural and easy to see. If you keep those typos and grammar errors down, this will definitely be one of my favorite stories. Keep it up!
Kawaii Panda-Chan 2006-11-11 ch 1,	abuseCool. Lot'a typos, but nothing that can't be fixed. I really like the idea of this story, though I don't really do incest. Anyways, it's funny that all Shiro's friends are hot. Maybe it is true that hot guys seem to gravitate toward each other... AAHH! That came out wrong!! >.< I meant that hot guys tend to hang out with each other. Yes. That's what I meant. nods several times Okay, you better update soon! Okay? Okay! (Wow, I'm being annoying...) Anyways: love this, update soon, please R&R my stories. Starlite-Dragin
xxBLOOD-of-SANITYxx 2005-08-25 ch 1,	abusegasp i can't believe u did a cliffy! i wanna read chappie 2...whines like a little kid yea i no, i'm weird. but anyways, great story! i am luving ur them!

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