how can you write so much with such amazing detail? that's incredible.

photography is awesome. I like the way the poem starts out. The proof bit I liked best and it pulled me in well. The ending was good too. I really liked this. The phrasing is really interesting, like "weak rythym sextion" and "carbon copy of your ideal" Nice.

painfully true, and in beautiful free verse, with rhythm and verse as holistic as ever; expecting and finding nothing short of a delightful read and the deepest of insight and inspiration. continue without adieu.

kakyou

beautiful... awesome awesome poem

I love the imagery and metaphors used here but everything seemed to jump out all at once, it probably would be more powerful if you used stanzas.

There were such beautiful phrases and word use in this, it's amazing. I loved the imagery in this too, like 'dead of December' and the whole butterfly analogy. The whole thing is just fantastic. Truly.

(is insanely jealouse) your skills with metaphors are completly out of this world. the poem made me feel so numb after reading this, a perfect devoid of emotion and I could scarcly think of a decent review for this for an hour or so. wonderful. overflowing with beauty. a gem which has the distinct voice of sadness to it with eacery word. reminds me of a siren's song. ;)

~* noelle

Very, very powerful and sad. I like it though.

I must say, this was very VERY long. Hmm, the metaphors are nice but... something is lacking.. Aside from that, this only lacks just a tiny bit from your other classics like "Static" or "Entropy". Keep writing. -Arcane Devices

Powerful and passionate, I loved that first line. This was so amazing I don't even know where to begin, the detail jumps out at you and the power of your words surrender the reader to this tale.

Much love,Juliet.