Wow, this was REALLY well done! The language was really... pretty? No, not pretty... I don't know, the word choice was just really good and lyrical and gave awesome images. The lines that hit me really hard were "And most of all, she wasn’t worth a friend, wasn’t worth sharing an umbrella with. And that’s the thing about crying in the rain – no one will notice that those splashes of water aren’t simply raindrops." That was just so emotional and so strong. Overall, I adored this. It was awesomely written. You rock! ^.^ Great writing, keep it up!

Oh, this was nice. And well written. Is it a oneshot? Or are you going to continue it. Either way would work I think. I like the ending. Good job.

Is this the whole thing or are you going to continue? I thought it was really good, the imagery is very interesting. Anyway, I can't think of anything bad to say! Keep it up!