I'm a bit confused about what's actually happening but its obviously quite good since I read all eight parts:)

(Hmm constructive criticism. Well, it sounds fussy but I hate giving pointless reviews that don't help the writer so I suppose the sentence:-

Sophia wondered, smiling shyly at Edele who stared at her feet afterwards, a permanent pout on her lips.

You could get rid of the 'afterwards' since I think it would read better... but you don't have to of course.)

Anyway, I really like the mystery of this and it seems like a pretty good story so update soon!

~~Historical Me

-Will put his hand over his mouth, stunned.- Why is he stunned now, when a moment ago he was alert enough to speak to her, and to notice the others around them?

-“You think God lives in this chapel?”- Heheh.

-Stephen smirked, stooping down to blow out one candle and kicking casually at the benches with his muddied shoes.- Pretty tactless, ain't he?

-“Oh, please speak to me,” Will implored,- He's so sweet. I like him.

-There was a silent and she went slowly to the bed.- *silence

-“I should have known it when you offered to bring me here, not knowing where the corridor even led to. I should have known it when we left the others behind. Do you remember what I said, Will?”- She sure vascillates quickly between clinging to him, and accusing him. And he sure takes it to heart fast. He shouldn't be so touchy-- he should remember how scared she is. Then again, he is too, no doubt. I can't imagine being in a situation like they are.

-They reflected blatant contempt for him, even when they did not know him.- That's kinda sad, eh? To have people so hastily dislike you. Although it's not like he tries very hard to be endearing. Though he did, to Catherine.

-“Thank you,” she whispered, cupping the berries into her mouth and taking a small bite from the apple.- Hmm-hmm. That's decidedly sweet of him. If Will doesn't watch it, he's going to be left behind. That was pretty mean to just walk out on her when she was so scared.

Anyway... very good story so far. I'm following it with delight. :) I hope you post more soon.

Take care! Thanks for the great reads.

-“I fear a fever if I do not rest,” she added, expecting Laura’s gasp for worry and receiving just that and a wet cloth slapped across her cool brow.- LOL I love that--"slapped across her cool brow"

-She had them to, and so did Sophia.- *too

-The dark one, Stephen, and who was also not as old as the rest, frowned at Will’s speed and scowled at the rain. It was in the late afternoon that they reached the wall.- hehe, I might eventually take back saying I don't like Stephen. Maybe. He's starting to remind me of Sawyer, on 'Lost', and I love Sawyer.

-Her sister had been sleeping below deck when it happened, she was sure, but she could hardly remember.- Huh? Does Catherina have amnesia? Because since she was urging Hannah to pray as the storm swept across the ship, I assmued they were together.

-All this time she had wept for Will.- Ah. That's cute. :) The plot thickens ;) (And I'm glad to see Catherine alive.)

-Catherine hummed and sung a hymn that faded quickly from a cheery ode to a mournful dirge.- *sang

-“Catherine’s eyes- delete *"

-Even when she saw Will. He stood breathlessly at the door, his eyes wandering first to white Catherine kneeling upon the stone, and then to the rows of lighted candles.- Aww! And I love this description of Catherine and the room, through Will's eyes.

-Supported by the fragile shoulder of a younger girl, and holding a lighted candle in one trembling hand, the old woman called Sarah moved into the dim light pouring from the window of the hut.- Ah, a moment of truth. ;) And since there's only one more chapter posted here, I'm gunna read that too ;) ...

-“Oh, the very pretty one on the hill.”- LOL, these three women are so intensely different. And Hannah's sullenness is actually growing on me. I kinda like it. And I definitely like Sophia's childish innocence; it's very sweet, even if it is also strange.

-“We will be the best of friends, the three of us.”- Haha, that's hard to imagine.

-“Oh, how precious,” Laura chuckled.- She's cute. :)

-“Why would you wait until a day has past?”- *passed

-“Except for the old woman… she grunts and screams like she is dying.- Oh, poor thing :( That's awful.

-“That was Stephen,” Sophia whispered, as if he could hear her. “I don’t like him.”- Yeah me neither, especially if he's the same curly-haired guy who was stealing dead women's wedding rings. Creep :|

I have to get up way early for work, but I'm gunna read one more chapter first.. though I'll probably regret it in the morning, when I'm sleepy :P

-“There are no heroes or villains in this world,” Hannah said darkly- -“Can one be both?- Interesting conversation, there. It makes one think.

-“My fire went out,” she added. “The old woman has probably shivered to death.”- Oh my word, poor Sarah! I can't believe Hannah just left her there. She's rather self-absorbed, isn't she.

-The whole world seemed filled with sighs. And Sophia decided that even Homer could not match her sorrow.- Yeah, Sophia, I can relate.

Another good chapter-- it definitely piques my interest as to who these people are, and how their lives will intertwine in the future. And the light in the castle!! That is an absolutely fascinating plot twist.

-She avoided the emaciated face upon the pillow, so frail and fragile.- Ah, this is sad. So many people are afraid of the frail, the elderly-- and they let that fear keep them ever reaching out to those people. It's really too bad. (Heh, I work in a Nursing Home. So this is kind of a sore sport for me-- the way the elderly are so often mistreated.)

-But the blanket was keeping her warm.- I think you meant it *wasn't keeping her warm.. ?

-Her teeth chattered defiantly and her whole body shuddered so that the pain in her leg was rattled alive again.- One example of your excellent, insightful descriptors.

-Water like tar swallowed her then spit her out again.- There's two totally different thoughts in there. It would flow more reasonably if there was a comma. "Water like tar swallowed her, then spit her out again." Just my suggestion :)

-Others them were silent, still locked in their disbelief.- delete *them

-“The priest told me – but I have not yet heard anything. I think only some people can. Prophets.”- Interesting.

-“Ha! You are mad.” And Hannah would taunt her until Catherine shut herself in her room with tears streaming down her pale cheeks.- Aww..

-She suddenly threw up her hands and let out a shriek to wake the drowned.- Heheh, well-put. "To wake the drowned"

-a books of morals she had learned by heart as a small child,- delete *a

-“Be quiet!” she yelled finally, “or I shall find another hut to sleep in.”- At first I couldn't figure out if this was Sarah speaking, or Hannah. We go directly from Sarah's eyes, to this comment. Maybe clarify that Hannah yelled this.

-Hannah looked more closely at the structure on the hill, its tiny windows emitting light.- Oh.. what an excellent closing line!!

Hm interesting. This is kinda like a medeival-ish version of the TV show 'Lost', heheh. I've been dying to write a "marooned" story ever since I watched the first episode of that show ;) There are so many fascinating things you can do with this kind of plot.

Hannah's interesting too. She wouldn't have cared if she died; but she's horrified that Catherina may have, even though I'm sure it occured to her the night before that her sister would probably die if she did. It's like it just finally hit her. Poor girl.

And this guy... I wanna know more about him.

M, another intriguing prologue ;) You're very very good at these. It looks like you're a pretty prolific writer-- I'm glad. Because you're good at it. :)

I love this prologue, all in all. It's quite fascinating. You encapsulate just enough to clarify what's going on, and make me itch to read more.

One suggestion: -Our ship disappeared beneath the waves and darkness, once proud vessel.- That sentence reads really oddly. Maybe try "Our ship, once proud vessel, disappeared beneath the waves and darkness."

On to chapter 1...

UPDATE SON!

Ah, I love this, I really do. I'm enjoying the character development. I know we're supposed to offer constructive criticism, but quite honestly I can find nothing wrong with your work in the slightest. Update soon. :)

Gasp! How could it be that I haven't seen this story before now? At any rate, it's lovely so far. I'm envious of your writing style; you make each scene vivid and real. I like the sense of bewilderment and despair that you so aptly portray amongst Hannah. I look forward to reading the further chapters.

I'm rather curious, why did you decide to put the character list here?

Again, this chapter is very mysterious. I like it...especially the regret Hannah has for the way she treated Catherine and the strange village and castle. I do wonder though, what time period is this in?

Whoa! I loved this chapter. Very intriguing, realistic and mysterious! I want to find out more...

I'm really liking this. You have a very good writing style. I can't wait to see where it goes.