This was a really cool piece...the way you structured it and the ending really were very creative.

I really like this story. The structure and wording of the story was different, but in a good way! Keep up the good work!

I have to say, its not what I was expecting. I really like the way you structured the story.

The whole.. structure of a relationship vs. structure of a joke.

Well written. I liked it.

An excellent analogy. All the little details aout the characters and their relationship were very interesting; it made me want to keep reading. I think the conclusion was my favorite part. It is a great punchline.

By the way, thanks for your great review! It was very helpful :D

This piece is wonderful. O.o You have an amazing descriptive ability..heck, I don't even know if that's a correct term, but you know what I mean.

Good job. O.o

Wow... That is a truly amazing and detailed piece. You've done an amazing job with this and I am thrilled to be able to say that I have read it. Keep writing because this is an amazing piece!

Fantastic emotion and imagery and flow! Really, I am captivated. Granted, I must admit I don't understand all of the joke analogy, but it was nonetheless a unique analogy and very well-done. I mean, wow. I loved the italics as his "joke"; I could practically hear them spoken. And the flow was unbelievable. *laughs* I'm barely coherent, I'm so amazed. Too bad my favorites list is full... Very very nice job.

Wow. really good job. it's very interesting how you use the joke as a sort of analogy for the relationship and betrayl. i love it.

good read.

awesome, as usual! u know i adore this one =D wow, i didn't relaize the first tiem that he was cheating..he was cheating, right? so sad. neway, good work!JB

simply amazing.

Wow. Beautiful writing...and so sad. Wow...Reminds me of my last two relationships...

Wow! This is great! I love the way you structured it, and how yoy keep on drawing back to things in the past. Five stars!

this is a really cool idea. keep writing. could develope ti a bit more