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| Nia 2008-01-25 ch 1, anon. | abuseI really like this story. The structure and wording of the story was different, but in a good way! Keep up the good work! |
| Lysander Finn 2006-06-25 ch 1,  | abuseI have to say, its not what I was expecting. I really like the way you structured the story. The whole.. structure of a relationship vs. structure of a joke. Well written. I liked it. |
| Runic Binary 2006-04-26 ch 1, | abuseAn excellent analogy. All the little details aout the characters and their relationship were very interesting; it made me want to keep reading. I think the conclusion was my favorite part. It is a great punchline. By the way, thanks for your great review! It was very helpful :D |
| Firespirit44 2006-04-26 ch 1, | abuseThis piece is wonderful. O.o You have an amazing descriptive ability..heck, I don't even know if that's a correct term, but you know what I mean. Good job. O.o |
| crystal teardrop rain 2006-01-11 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow... That is a truly amazing and detailed piece. You've done an amazing job with this and I am thrilled to be able to say that I have read it. Keep writing because this is an amazing piece! |
| Lady E 2006-01-03 ch 1, | abuseFantastic emotion and imagery and flow! Really, I am captivated. Granted, I must admit I don't understand all of the joke analogy, but it was nonetheless a unique analogy and very well-done. I mean, wow. I loved the italics as his "joke"; I could practically hear them spoken. And the flow was unbelievable. *laughs* I'm barely coherent, I'm so amazed. Too bad my favorites list is full... Very very nice job. |
| Lonely Forest 2005-10-10 ch 1, | abuseWow. really good job. it's very interesting how you use the joke as a sort of analogy for the relationship and betrayl. i love it. good read. |
| Jaizar 2005-08-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseawesome, as usual! u know i adore this one =D wow, i didn't relaize the first tiem that he was cheating..he was cheating, right? so sad. neway, good work!JB |
| Rebane 2005-08-20 ch 1, | abusesimply amazing. |
| account not in use 2005-08-20 ch 1, | abuseWow. Beautiful writing...and so sad. Wow...Reminds me of my last two relationships... |
| chuppachupgirl 2005-08-20 ch 1, anon. | abuseWow! This is great! I love the way you structured it, and how yoy keep on drawing back to things in the past. Five stars! |
| Sally-andersonn 2005-08-19 ch 1, | abusethis is a really cool idea. keep writing. could develope ti a bit more |