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| Loganberry 2006-11-03 ch 1, | abuseHighly atmospheric and evocative, with a strong impression of the sharp senses the creature is feeling all around. Nice ending too. In need of copyediting, though. |
| umbrius 2005-09-05 ch 1, | abuseJoe:... Kyr:... Joe:...rage...anger... Kyr:...the only two emotions we fear to release... Joe:...again... |
| Sati 2005-08-23 ch 1, anon. | abuseThrough the trees she could smell his scent,it was one she had smelled many times before.He couldnt run from her..not this time,he was hers and she was his.Standing in the clearing she waited,the nights air whisped through her fur,her breath growing shallow as she watched the shadows of the trees...in a blink of and i she caught his scent...carried along the breeze...wrapping around her...she could feel his eyes watching her...he did that often at times...but not this time...she would catch him soon.Lunging into the darkness she missed her mark and caught him a few inches short...standing in front of him she licked her lips...the sweet glistening of her tongue caught his eye as a seductive puurs slipped through pouty lips...stepping closer her body awakend to his scent..it was like pure ecstacy..pushing him to the ground...her body straddled him..her hips rolled lightly against him as she leaned down and whisperd..."Mine" |