pure flawed genius. amazing

wow i have never read anything like this, its really beautiful.

wow, this is so beautiful & wonderfully written - i love it. personally, i'm not a big fan of structured poetry, but this was amazing. this type of poem must be extremely difficult to write, but you wrote this very well. brilliant job.

I've actually never heard of these before. You've definitly inspired me to try my own. Great write ;)

I loved this poem, I've never read anything like it before and structure and content-wise, it's brilliant. (:

i thought this was a really interesting piece... structure and contentwise. nicely done.

Well...I was never a fan of structured poetry. I honestly find it too rigid, and it doesn't leave room for a lot of creativity. The theme of this poem is good, and the structure is interesting, the idea of reusing the words to create a different idea - but it's a stretch. I think this is the kind of thing that really has to be revised and worked at for a while - otherwise it doesn't work. Also, the repetition bothers me. It's alot space taken up by alot of the same thing. All in all there's really nothing wrong with your writing - I just didn't like the structure. I alittle bit of revision on lines like 'and i am guding he to finding star.' I know that your supposed to reuse the words used in the stanza, but it's such a break from hte flow of the poem.

Thanks for the review and keep writing.

I loved this, I havn't read a paradelle poem is so long, no one hardly writes in this format anymore. I used to write these when I was a kid, keep up the good work.

Much love,Juliet.