This chapter is a little confusing. In the detention part I don't understand who she throws the letter to. Warren.?. Fox.?. Both.?.
Other than that I really like this except for the 2nd chap. Very weird but I've got the gist of it now ;)

really awesome chapter. the only error that really stuck out was that it's spelled somersault, not summer salt. :) LOL.

Hey, I noticed you haven't done anything for a while maybe its writers block, maybe it's real life but you should really start up again. Do you know how many unfinished stories you have on this site? Not to be an ** or anything but I just went back and re-read some and I got all pouty faced because they weren't finished. Love to see a new chapter on any of them. Kisses

WooHoo!! love this story so much!! im so hooked!

great great story!!

the story was pretty good but this was kind of a weird ending

I LOVED IT. Jordan and Warrick are great for each other. I really want to read the sequel but i'm worried I won't like it cuz he cheats.

Ok, I so love the first story, as much as I love the second!! lol, I read the second first, and now I REALLY can't wait for an update on it!

Great story! You could have made a little tad more with the ending chapter, but I like that you didn't extended it more that you needed to. Little is liked, too much is disliked. I love Warrick's personality: flaws and everything, I love it. You have some minor grammar flaws (a "you're" in place of a "your" or a "too" in place of a "to"), but this story is really good. Keep it up!

You used 'than' instead of then a couple times in the beginning and I think in the end you meant to say 'The teacher stood up again and started to' yell instead of laugh.

Love your story!

One inconsistency with the rest of the story (yes, I have read this before... *shifty eyes* yes, I am obsessed :D)

yet I, and anyone who didn’t live under a rock at our school, knew not to take him lightly. The only reason he was never expelled was because his dad was filthy rich and always bought him back in.

Isn't Fox's dad a charity worker (too tired to try and think of a better way to put it) and can hardly support their family?

LOVE the story + Sequel (please update Something soon?)

Ok
1. I was reading a little bit of something when I decided I wanted to come back to this story cause I remember when I was in like 8th grade reading this and how much I loved it and still do
2. This story is the reason I looked up Hollywood Undead and fell in love
3. Did you know their first CD just came out Tuesday and I'm finally going to get it today and I am beyond excited
4. The add on this page is for the new Hollywood Undead CD and I just had to mention that cause it was like the twilight zone or something
=]

because, we all know she loves Warrick :D

haha. mommys so pretty people dont notice how
yucky daddy is. XDD

hmm. since warricks had an encounter with
a cheating girlfriend, how could he cheat on her
in the next story? lol

adorable scene at the end there :D