The Amu
2005-08-22
ch 1,  | abuseWell it rhymes. It's a common idea. You might have tried to do the entire thing from the perspective of the sword. Such an impersonal approach would highlight the futility and the senselessness of a battle like this. The sword would have no emotion and would percieve no emotion. Or else you could write purely from the perspective of one soldier, and not describe anything but the reactionary impulses of the one person. Never describing action so to speak but only thought, even just single words. Or motivations. I dunno if I'm explaining it in a way you can understand. But simply put, try to do something original and different, something unexpected with it. You may lose a lot of detail but you will gain SO much more feeling. And feeling is what's important. |
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