Whoa, what did she do? Don't leave me in angst like this! Maybe more experianced, elite writers could easily go "oh poo, fix this and this, you boogerhead" but I cannot find much wrong with this :D like...anything ^_^ It didn't go into too much detail like a story would, so it feels real. way cool ^_^

Hello there :D I didn't realise you were on FP! This is a really cool way to write a story, very original.

=O i want the original ending also rofl i love depressing its what makes a story interesting...or homosexuality or transsexuals or...ok talking on now about stuff you probably dont want to hear *grins* sorry...