Freaky freaky! I realize now that i should prolly make an effort to actually critique, since you do (and i appreciate! it's always scary for me to be critiqued, cause I feel stupid, but thats the point, to learn eh?) the ONLY and I'm reaching desperately here, the ONLY thing I can say critiquely is that the rhyming suddenly shifts and it threw me off for a sec. dats it ^_^

once again, your poems and mine really compare...kinda creepy almost!! thanks for your other reviews on my poems...you might want to check out "envisioning" and "heartfelt" if you haven't read 'em yet. Your stuff is so good! -liriane

Great imagery when you say "chains have fallen/lying discared on the floor"...and i like how some lines are repeated at the end.